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Ink imp
she peeks out from candlelight
into the shadows cast about
concrete chamber walls
silhouette blends
fades disappears
appears again
her tepid tears
fill a chalice
as she urges me
with silent taunts
to stain these
paper altars
with verse
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Candlewitch
Wed, 2012-02-22 13:08
ink imp!
Good title. Is she your muse? Good language usage. I like the style as I use it often myself :) Good content and flow from one line to the next. Favorite lines:
as she urges me
with silent taunts
to stain these
paper altars
with verse
always, Cat
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IKnowNoBox
Wed, 2012-02-22 20:59
Thank you Cat
I am revisiting some of my older writes from the crashed archives, thank you for reading good to hear from you.
In ink,
David
author commentweirdelf
Thu, 2012-02-23 00:07
I read it differently, and so it should be.
Soon we will run a workshop on internal logic and meaning in poetry, please join it.
A very fine poem, it achieves emotion and meaning with elegance.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
IKnowNoBox
Wed, 2012-03-14 20:46
thank you for stopping by,
I do look forward to attending a workshop.
author commentCloudthings
Wed, 2012-04-11 01:04
So much in here, a poem for keeping to reread many a time
A wonderful work, this one, it is like unravelling string, working out who is who in the returning poets! I am intrigued... whatever the case, I am a fan, this poem is as good as I would aspire to any day. Glad you have returned who-ever you were before... So much in here, a poem for keeping to reread many a time.
Cheers
Anni
Cheers
Anni
My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"
IKnowNoBox
Fri, 2012-04-27 21:47
Thank you.
in ink,
David
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