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Fuck covid 19 and august
I had a life
Finally i was free to live the normal way
I could lie and dance along to their rhythms
I could at last live a’ normal’ day
But then this happens
Coping mechanisms gone up shit’s creek
My ability to fake to emotions perish
My stamina weak
I build heavier walls
Found strange comfort in the loneliness
Cut off connection to friends alike
Feel into my void abyss
Now I’m picking up pieces
Acceptance is a new term
I’ve never considered it before
But I guess I’ll learn
I’ve lost so much
And learned from it
now my scattered pieces lay on the floor
loved ones ripped away from the collection
now i see a broken figure
when i look at my reflection
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
Ray Whitaker
Tue, 2020-08-18 20:07
Such authencity... i have heard friends
Say things very similar. like in conversations with them on the phone, or in an email. Nice capture of the rawness of our calamity.
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Candlewitch
Wed, 2020-08-19 08:06
hello,
I agree with Teddy! please enter this in the contest, and good luck!
*always, Cat
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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
FreddieM
Wed, 2021-01-06 12:11
yes
I love this the rhyming fits so feel for the emotion you're trying to get across. like a facetime call with a friend seems casually written but can tell the thought and process behind the raw emotions. fist verses seem to not fit perfectly but could be intended it seems to work. the rest is gold imagery is very nice I enjoyed it a lot. gets across the frustration and lack of motivation despite having to pull through for others. love it
Dandini
Sat, 2021-01-09 20:28
Dear Mark, I am sorry to hear
Dear Mark, I am sorry to hear you have contracted Covid-19 and I wish you a full recovery.
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Ray Whitaker
Sat, 2021-01-09 14:16
Good Luck to you Mark
best wishes for a speedy uncomplicated recovery
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scribbler
Sat, 2021-01-09 23:20
Resignation
although easy to give into should never be indulged. I like your poem