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A Fart For All Mankind

Submitted by Edna Sweetlove on Sat, 2019-12-14 17:06

I heard the world's loudest fart today
It echoed round the town enough to say
"I am a fart of great renown and fame,
I am a fart who's worthy of the name
Of KING of FARTS!" Unthinkingly I sniffed
And, let me tell you, I have never whiffed
Aught so potent, dank and dread and foul
Blasted out from heaving human bowel
As that king of farts I smelled today
And which took my fucking breath away.

Who was the pumper of that putrid beauty?
How many curries in the line of duty
Had he consumed? It must have been a man -
No pong so strong ere blew from female can.
Can no one answer yet my urgent question:
And say who suffereth such dire indigestion?
O heavens! his torment must be something chronic.
Can no one subsidise a high colonic
Irrigation to prevent another
Noisier and more noisome than its younger brother?

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This has a slightly Shakespearian or even Chaucerian ring to it I feel. Or maybe even Marlovian, bearing in mind some of Christopher's well-documented sodomitic frolics. Yes I know it's a teeny bit vulgar, but then so were Shakespeare, Chaucer, and Marlowe. Nice rhymes. .
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Geezer

Sun, 2019-12-15 11:51

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Starting with the last request of critique first; the theme, while not something for the average dinner table or palette, is a subject that occurs frequently in some circles. So, a thumbs up there.
The language lends itself to the style and fits. The RPOPing went well. The title lets one know what they are in for from the get-go. ~ Geezer.
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Edna Sweetlove

Sun, 2019-12-15 12:35

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I looked up RPOP and got.... Radiation Protection of Patients (RPOP) – the leading resource for health professionals, patients and public on the safe and effective use of radiation in medicine

So I am puzzled.

PS People often fart at the dinner table, especially after sprouts and cabbage. Although I never eat either of these disgusting vegetables, I find that rare lamb can also cause spectacular anal atmospheric emissions.
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Geezer

Sun, 2019-12-15 16:16

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was in regards to rhythm, pattern or pacing, lol.
Sorry to have you searching for it. As for farting at the table, it's not a common occurrence in my house even if we do eat cabbage and brussels, if I had indulged in it while growing up, my mother would have sent me from the table and I would have finished later, by myself. ~Geezer.
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Edna Sweetlove

Sun, 2019-12-15 16:39

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...a fart can be silent, like the 'p' in pneumonia as well as a pee in the snow.

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Geezer

Tue, 2019-12-17 08:14

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had to own up to it and if I had blamed it on my sisters, I would have suffered doubly after being found out.
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Edna Sweetlove

Tue, 2019-12-17 10:55

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Nay! Claim it proudly!

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