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In the Beginning

Again we meet
in the shadow
of death and dawn,
savouring
this last shared
breath, tasting,
tomorrow

So it begins
and.ends, in that
first gasp of light...

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by being the dawn
to wish you well
this bright morn

as you surface
from bygones

let them go
as you know
tomorrow comes
but some won't know

you are the rising star
showing the zenith from far
all await your up-rise
and
I your smiles

unforgotten
Loved!

I don't dwell on things so much these days and I take it one day at a time
life will bring what life will bring and one way or another I always seem
to get through the mire of shit I sometimes wade through

thanks for reading this is pretty much done I have no plans for edits at this stage
maybe later on with a set of fresh eyes

much love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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We could not reach you as you lay ill, yet the children told us not to worry.
This piece is good, so now we are through the other side of maybe, it is time to play again, but slowly.
Great to have you back and I look forward to reading more of your writes, Yours as always Ian xx
PS:- feels like we burnt the food, so we have to clear it all up and start again lol.

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Its been a long few months and I am glad its nearly over
I am hoping Friday to get my stitches out as I have about
forty or so that they have to remove

I am so NOT looking forward to that lol

thanks for reading I thought this was a good way to return
something simple and easily understood by all

much love always Jayne xxxxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Good to see you getting back again and posting poems in your inimitable style. More often than not they make me read them more than once.

Be well..Much love and hugs...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you for the welcome back seems like I have something wrong with me one way or another these last nine months, I am slowly coming good I felt really good last weekend and expected to come back earlier in the week but I put the cart before the horse as I sometimes do lol

thanks for reading I appreciate it very much

love and hugs Jayne xxxxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Lovely! Both the poem and seeing you back! Looking forward to seeing more! Hope you your feeling better. :)

Love Mand xxxxxxx

Thank you I am so happy you liked this one, its one I wrote in recovery I was in there for twelve hours lol I had to do something to fill the time lol.. I am slowly healing its taking a little longer this time round

much love big hugs Jayne xxxxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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A lot said in a few words. And it's great. Hope you're back for a while.

Scott

I will be around a lot more as time permits with healing etc, it only been in the last few days I can stay up for any length of time before I was getting tired lol I have a lot of sleep to catch up on, it was two operations in one week knocked me on my ass but I am doing much better now, I have to have rehab and in the middle of all that I am going away on a holiday but I will be able to show you guys where I am and what I am seeing with the poems I most definitely be posting lol

thanks for the welcome back hun its much appreciated

much love Jayne xxxxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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agree with everyone's comments.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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big smiles, I am Very happy you liked it hun

love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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I look forward to more.

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Very happy you liked it hun, hope life's treating you well, OooOOoOooo btw I am going to Fleury's exhibition at the end of next week, be good if you had time to come too ;) meet you both ?

love Jayne xxxxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Sorry to be late on this one, nor do I have much to add except that it was a good read, as are most of yours, and I offer my kudos, such as they are! Hope everything is going well with you and that you enjoy your day down under!

This is really a little bit of morphine and a lot of anesthetic I was in recovery for quite some time so I borrowed a pen and paper off the nurse lol I have a lot of other poems I am working on but I will have to get to them when my health and time allows

much love to you both Jayne xx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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