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Andante

Summanus chants
Ratri Ratri

supple thunder
Anoints the collared courtesan

worthy now to rove within his sovereignty

allowed hommage
palm may rest upon her lovers marbled skin

no awl to fear
no elegy to prose

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Andante, Andante, your title, just brought to me the ABBA song of that name, I know it is a mix of Roman Gods and Hindu words, but it left confusion here, I hope there is a reason that I can re read and understand this piece, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

puzzeled pieces
tend to obscure
forgive my thick veil

roman god of nocturnal thunder
asks permission from the protectress of the night

she allows only a supple thunder to fall upon
the bound one, yet thunder strong enough to Anoint and bless

simply a girl in love with the unatainable lover without the aid of the Gods
lost

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I missed the wonderous of the betrothed...

thunder seasons soon
the white winds calling to the ice
still fast upon the sleeping face

I have mere notions of the great
plays and Gods
yet I remember some of the routes
have seen the interpretations
of their muse intent

forty one minutes and falling
in need of coffee and peanut butter
toast..sit in the padded lawn chair
at a temp adress
and ponder all of this

One thing is certian I admire
your writing
your mind
your creative verve

Thank You!

Summanus chants
Ratri Ratri ---having a roman god chant hindi is a bit much

allowed hommage -homage

no elegy to prose-strange use of prose but i like it

Its an interesting poem i like its enigmatic quality

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