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Paragon expections
Lay heavily
Gasps form

Sweet summer breeze
Caress the madness
White sheers flutter
A cradled paradise

Legions history
Form the view

Scents grasped
To swallow the fever
Paradigm inhales each thought

Tangled reflections

Kiss of history
Smears reason
Laying unbendable

Soft greens unseen
Sounds mystery unheard
Life unbearable

Swimming toward the other side

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A strong emotive piece. Did you mean to do a poem for the workshop? The form of this one doesn't match any of the workshop options. Strong work nonetheless.


Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

Have read this slowly a couple of times and it is very good, just a couple of things I have picked up in the reading:-
Paragon expections (Did you mean Expectations)
White sheers flutter ( Did you mean Sheets)
Scents grasped ( I am bad, I don't like scent, always go for Perfume)
Keep up this style, it is hard to write short lines and retain the message.
Take care out there, Yours Ian.T

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