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All That is Golden

Submitted by MDT on Mon, 2012-04-09 15:33

stars in my eyes
they shine
and the scent in the air
is fine
flowers as thoughts,
form into words ,
as a synchronized frequency in tune
with the music made by the moon

secrets and marvel
unfold
all that is golden
is sold
But love remains.

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Nordic cloud

Mon, 2012-04-09 15:56

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This is charming, it needs some work on it, but the skeleton leaf of it is cast, now lets see...

I don't know why but the scent of the air is fine, specially the last two words seem not in keeping with the slight mystery your poem gives us. It sort of sits down there for a rest.

frequency sings in tune? with the music made by the ....something....moon?

Secrets...there's an s here so MarvelS should follow suit?

I was just doing this and that as it has something special in spite of its simplicity.
Keep writing, L.Nordic cloud.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

Cloudthings

Wed, 2012-04-11 03:48

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Brilliant... a little treasure this one, I wouldn't change anything about it, it run & flows so well & lands in the right places in every way in my opinion.

Love it!

Cloud (the other one!)

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

Cloudthings

Wed, 2012-04-11 03:51

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I have now read Anns comment, no oposition intended, I can see her comments are worthy... just I usually comment before I read any other comments so mine are strictly uncloloured by any other issue or perspective... Hello cloud-sister!.... I sttill love it just as it is, merely my opinion.
xx
A

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

MDT

Wed, 2012-04-11 16:05

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hi, thank you for appreciating my poem :)

Peace love and harmony light the path we must take. - MDT

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Nordic cloud

Thu, 2012-04-12 11:46

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Not in the least perturbed by your comment dear Anni, I just wrote what I felt then, its only an opinion. And bother it, now I cannot see the poem in this box of reply, so will stop here with a smile. Annushka.

Back now to agree with you, this is like a little innocent flower in a great wide landscape, lovely. MDT

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

MDT

Thu, 2012-04-12 20:41

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thanks nordic :)

Peace love and harmony light the path we must take. - MDT

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