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Euphoria
With eyes set beyond the horizon
back turned to the distant shore
suspended in the oblivion
between darkness and light
the sound of silence
greets the soul
into a peaceful Nirvana
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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
raj
Wed, 2011-07-06 14:15
Dearest JayCee
thank you for the read and your comment...
much love..
raj (sublime_ocean)
loved
Sun, 2011-07-03 08:09
your euphoria
is vastly different
from euphoria
what human beings experience ,
tis your way ,
mine is totally different
loved
raj
Wed, 2011-07-06 14:15
Dear Loved
thank you for the read and your comment....it is all about perception isn't it..everyone looks at it differently...
love..
raj (sublime_ocean)
loved
Thu, 2011-07-07 00:42
HOW well said
Bandra view
is different from Marine Drive
though both are like
Florida beaches
loved
Bonitaj
Sun, 2011-07-03 12:24
Raj!
loved this 'suspended in oblivion'! Euphoria indeed and a good capturing thereof in words ;)
Boni
Bonitaj
raj
Wed, 2011-07-06 14:16
Boni..
thanks for stopping by and your comment..good to know you liked it..
raj (sublime_ocean)
raj
Wed, 2011-07-06 14:18
Lonnie
thank you for the read and your comment..nice to know you found it effective...i always look forward to your comments ...which are encouraging...
raj (sublime_ocean)
ShePra
Mon, 2011-07-04 14:50
Dear Raj
Dear Raj
How beautifully can "the sound of silence" can define "Euphora"... i always enjoyed your work..
God Bless
ShePra
raj
Wed, 2011-07-06 14:19
Hi ShePra
thank you for the read and your comment..nice to know you enjoyed it...
much love..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Geezer
Thu, 2011-07-07 01:13
As one...
who has experienced lots of confusion and excitement lately, I tend to agree, that the sound of silence could be Nirvana. I do think that you could drop the word [abode], and it would still be effective.
[greets the soul into a peaceful Nirvana.] Just a thought, ~ Gee
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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raj
Thu, 2011-07-07 11:23
Thank you Geezer for the read
Thank you Geezer for the read..comment and suggestion...i already have effected the change suggested by you...
raj (sublime_ocean)
raj
Thu, 2011-07-07 11:33
Kal
Thanks for the read and dwelling on this piece...i certainly value your comment being much more learned and also because of your prowess as an accomplished poet..
i have taken note of your perception...but would like to put across what i attempted to convey in this write...the first two lines being the physical state transitioning into the oblivion (stage midway between life and after life) further transitioning of the soul sans entity into Nirvana ...of course i am not at all spiritually enlightened but just tried to imagine how the passage could be...being an amateur perhaps i couldn't get this across in my write...
regards...
raj (sublime_ocean)
raj
Thu, 2011-07-07 11:37
Ian..
thanks for the read and dwelling on it...please read my reply to the comment of Kal which will explain my take on passage of soul into Nirvana...as i have clarified...i am neither spiritually enlightened nor do i know anything about Theology...being an amateur i may have lacked in expressing my perceptions ..
regards...
raj (sublime_ocean)
raj
Thu, 2011-07-07 23:31
Ian
of course no one knows ...at least I don't...about what and how it actually happens..it is indeed mysterious....this was just a thought about how the transition could be from an embodied soul to a free soul...and the void could be am intermediary stage between the two..there is no theory ..no background....this is just a free ride into fantasy ..nothing more to it than that....
regards...
raj (sublime_ocean)
weirdelf
Fri, 2011-07-08 03:49
Contrary to some of the above comments,
I think this does describe nirvana well, forgetting that it is achieved from the elimination of desire, amongst other things. Many westerners can't comprehend it because the goal is nothingness and all other religions preach success and spiritual immortality.
Peace.
cheers,
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Leonard
Fri, 2011-07-08 04:28
Hi Raj
Nirvana - the extinguishing of desire, deep stilling of a mind opening up to a holistic consciousness in which the original state of man can be experienced.
I enjoyed the brevity packed with depth.
Leonard Daranjo
"When the waiting stops, the living begins"
loved
Thu, 2011-08-04 19:12
I HAVE READ THIS MASTER PIECE 100 TIMES NOW I HAVE BMD IT
U r not alone
I am the hardest stone
Which hits hard?
Yet tastes sweet,
If licked
And
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loved
loved
Sun, 2011-08-21 11:09
today Ido agree
ALL LIFE IS A MATTER
OF PERCEPTION
Ours is so DIfferent
opposite perhaps
loved