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Poemography [Sunku]
Feel me
she whispers
words just my mask
Verses
my costume
over essence
Beneath
I lay bare
my true colors
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
Last few words:
In this poem it is my attempt to capture the elements and aesthetics of Sunku Form, hence the title Poemography
Editing stage:
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Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2018-03-24 17:29
Very nice...
I don't know if I could find a better example. You kept the pattern, the theme and aesthetics of the Sunku form very well. ~ Geezer.
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raj
Sat, 2018-03-24 17:35
Hi Gee
Thank you for the read and your comments which mean a lot especially taking into consideration my intent in coming up with this Sunku......
regards...
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentchevyvent
Sun, 2018-03-25 00:27
Wonderful expression
Awww...great ending. Lessons learned sometimes mean that we have suffered pain, but with that comes understanding. These are thoughts that come to many at some point in life. Enjoyed the read."
I am privileged now to be able to sit and ponder on our veranda. It is where I get most inspiration, and this is inspirational. Thank you for sharing
well crafted into an eye-romancing beauty... Your lines and words are just lovely... Its nice visiting one of your pages again.."
Sounds like you were leaning back and dreaming and remembering. Beautiful!"
Mario Vitale
raj
Sun, 2018-03-25 04:53
Hi Mario
Thanks for the read and your elaborate comment. Good to know you also found it inspiring.
Regards...
raj (sublime_ocean)
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