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Turmoil
A school
of fish swam
in uniforms
Got caught
in torrent
of torment
Their ocean
in turmoil
turned bloody red
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How was my language use?
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Comments
IRiz
Sat, 2018-02-17 15:07
Scary tale!
Scary tale!
I think it is one of your best
IRiz
raj
Sat, 2018-02-17 15:12
Thanks for the time, visit
Thanks for the time, visit and comment Friend. Means a lot
Scare is the right word, which I could sense in their stare...
Regards
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentlovedly
Sun, 2018-02-18 08:55
just superbly excellent
at me all stare
what the hell
can a poet like me spell