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Alter Ego

Emerging like a shadow
pulled from the night.
Outlined by light,
he waits.

On noiseless feet
going where reality dares not
Those who did her wrong, he had not forgot
nor forgotten was the promise made.

On rage filled wings
he soars through the sky
deciding who's turn it is to die.
Talons outstretched, searching for prey.

Soul catcher, dream snatcher
A wounded heart, sworn to protect
following years of neglect.
The Raven will have his day

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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That's better we have a new concept of our loved Raven, there are three words where you say:- "sworn to protect", would this not be good as "sworn to revenge" as reading I feel the bad deed has been done and it is time for pay back ????
Loved the write anyway, Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thank you for the suggestion. The Raven protects the true self when things get too difficult or overwhelming, when true self has been wronged or damaged and its coping skills are slim to none. He is a shy, elusive character but a necessary part of the true self's survival. I am glad you enjoyed the read. I don't usually make my alter egos known. Most of you know Nevermore, she was born of something the Raven conjured up to avenge the wounded, scorned female side of the true self. The Raven, himself, only appears when things are beyond what the other two can handle. :) More to come.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

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I have to say I enjoyed this, not sure on the line that Ian mentioned it could go either way it depends on the tone your trying to set in the poem, at the end of the day its your poem and it is your decision but like I said it would work either way

nice to learn about your alter ego it really shows the heart of a poet when they put themselves in the form of some kind of animal not sure what animal I would be I would have to sit down and think about that one lol

nice to read you again enjoyed the read

love and hugs JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

I am glad you enjoyed this. We all have some writings that are rough around the edges but I took Beau's suggestion from the last poem I did and decided to try and keep with the same style (random couplets thrown in to provide more structure and balance to the piece). It may be a style all my own but it works. I am happy with it. As far as The Raven is concerned, in the visual part of my mind, when I get an image of him, he is more than just an animal. He is a man with the wings of a raven, long black hair and transparent blue eyes. He has long nails like talons, uses no weapons just his hands when avenging the true self. A dark angel if you will....he is torn between the affection he feels for the true self and the need and duty to protect her and his own demons. Since he was so well received, I may make him more noticeable, perhaps tell his story in more detail...thanks for the read and always good to hear from you....

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

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