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On disembarking In A Foreign Port
a rickity rainbow of houses and shops
fresh aroma of sugar cane and hops
street musicians sing to the sea
wrong-sided drivers scoff at me
but the amazing part is how I feel!
alive, tingling, shimmering zeal
and an urgent urge to giggle a'loud
..."I want to live here FOREVER!"
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Free verse
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Comments
Timbo
Thu, 2011-11-10 07:19
You certainly make it sound a
You certainly make it sound a nice place to be. It's amazing what can be said in just a few well written lines.
best regards,
Tim
brittle light
Mon, 2011-11-21 17:43
Tim
thank you for your time and thoughts. I do appreciate them
sincerely,
Al
pleiades
Mon, 2011-11-21 18:11
i absloutely LOVE your
i absloutely LOVE your opening line!
this poem for me, captures so wonderfully
the feeling of heightened senses when
arriving for the first time, somewhere that immediately
strikes a magical chord
i have felt as you described more than
a couple of times when travelling...it's terrific
to read a work that makes you feel connected
to it, and that's what i felt reading this
completely enjoyed this poem
cheers
p
brittle light
Tue, 2011-11-22 11:31
Glad you could connect. I too
Glad you could connect. I too like the first line...seems to read so smoothly, musically...If only all my lines had that quality! For now, I am glad when once in a while it happens that way....
thank you
Al