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On disembarking In A Foreign Port

a rickity rainbow of houses and shops
fresh aroma of sugar cane and hops
street musicians sing to the sea
wrong-sided drivers scoff at me

but the amazing part is how I feel!
alive, tingling, shimmering zeal
and an urgent urge to giggle a'loud

..."I want to live here FOREVER!"

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Free verse
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Comments

You certainly make it sound a nice place to be. It's amazing what can be said in just a few well written lines.
best regards,
Tim

thank you for your time and thoughts. I do appreciate them

sincerely,

Al

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i absloutely LOVE your opening line!

this poem for me, captures so wonderfully
the feeling of heightened senses when
arriving for the first time, somewhere that immediately
strikes a magical chord

i have felt as you described more than
a couple of times when travelling...it's terrific
to read a work that makes you feel connected
to it, and that's what i felt reading this

completely enjoyed this poem

cheers
p

Glad you could connect. I too like the first line...seems to read so smoothly, musically...If only all my lines had that quality! For now, I am glad when once in a while it happens that way....

thank you

Al

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