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Powerless
I've learned to hide
Where you can't find me.
I am the outsider.
I cover my pain,
Coat it with a veneer.
Of gladness.
Humour is my weapon of choice,
And my defence.
No one knows me
I'm out of control
So easy to hurt
i'm powerless
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Timbo
Thu, 2011-01-20 09:49
this is a powerful and
this is a powerful and excellent write, with a good message well put. Well done Lou on an excellent poem.
Tim
lou
Thu, 2011-01-20 10:37
Tim
Tim
Thank you
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Thu, 2011-01-20 13:19
Xena
Thank you. Your very kind.
love lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
ziggy
Fri, 2011-01-21 14:31
hi louise
" I cover my pain
coat it with a veneer
of gladness " what great lines and more besides strong write, well
put across , your always a good read louise ,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
lou
Fri, 2011-01-21 15:28
Ziggy
Thanks me mate, glad you like it
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Candlewitch
Tue, 2011-01-25 11:52
Dear Lou,
I'm out of control
So easy to hurt
i'm powerless
a great summing up of all your powerful feelings! It looks like I've missed a few of yours, so I'm here to catch up. Great work, my dear. I wouldn't change a word of it.
love, Cat
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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
lou
Tue, 2011-01-25 14:02
Cat
I'm very glad that you likede my work
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!