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Assonance and consonance work shop - examples

Assonance 

When sober Booze Hound is sound, yes he is solid
down to earth he is a bloke whose thoughts are coherent.
Thoughts are well founded and down right consistent

Consonance

Mad bad and low down
danger hides deep in the depths 
Of his dirty debauched  soul

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I'm guessing you know that the Elf is sick. He's asked me to "take over" the workshop until he returns. I of course said yes as I find it foolish to say no to magical creatures of any kind. My problem is I was looking forward to this shop because assonance and consonance, beyond the technical description, is rather beyond me. Our next assignment is to write a small piece on a specific mood or image using the "appropriate" assonance or consonance.
Here's my deal. When I read your sentence submissions all I hear is the sentence. I recognize the technique, but it changes nothing for me in the nature of the sentence.
What are your thoughts?
Alliteration I "hear" more clearly, but it is still nothing more than a trick to my ears. Until a poet loads too much alliteration it is only "cute". It does not seem to enhance the drama, sentimentality, humor or anything else. Too much of it sounds a little goofy, a little bit actually sounds kind of cool to me. So yes, I like the alliteration, but I don't hear a profound change in the character of the poem. Assonance and consonance, beyond recognizing it in a poem, does nothing. It simply repeats sounds to little effect.
Your consonance sentences are, effectively, alliteration to my ear. It does not add or detract.
Thoughts?
wesley

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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im not used to working with rules, i see this as a beginning.

lou

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author comment

they more apply to the second part of the workshop where we will look at matching the type of assonance/consonance to content.

For the exercise this is excellent.

cheers,
Jess
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