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Powerless

I've learned to hide
Where you can't find me.
I am the outsider.

I cover my pain, 
Coat it with a veneer.
Of gladness. 

Humour is my weapon of choice,
And my defence.
No one knows me 

I'm out of control
So easy to hurt
i'm powerless

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this is a powerful and excellent write, with a good message well put. Well done Lou on an excellent poem.
Tim

Tim

Thank you

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Thank you. Your very kind.

love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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" I cover my pain
coat it with a veneer
of gladness " what great lines and more besides strong write, well
put across , your always a good read louise ,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

Thanks me mate, glad you like it

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I'm out of control
So easy to hurt
i'm powerless

a great summing up of all your powerful feelings! It looks like I've missed a few of yours, so I'm here to catch up. Great work, my dear. I wouldn't change a word of it.

love, Cat

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lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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