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Spent

Memories like ashes
Blowing in the breeze
Separating and disappearing
A whisper
 
Thoughts of you 
Like tinder 
Burning me in your flames

Incinerating my brain
Leaving me breathless 
Insane

I construct barriers 
To keep you away
Too hot to touch 

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When I read about the ashes, I can see them in my mind spinning and twirling in the wind. This is great writing when you can SEE and FEEL what the writer is saying. I love it. Brings back some memories with it as well, bitter sweet ones i'll never forget.
Nichole

thank you

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I'm with Nichole, in recognizing your very great talent and ability to involve the reader in the reading experience. favorite lines:

Thoughts of you
Like tinder
Burning me in your flames

Incinerating my brain
Leaving me breathless
Insane

I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work.
always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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thank you so much

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Some folks.... spend
and many are
SPENT...
HAPPY NEW YEAR 2012,
ITS NOT THE END...

loved

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