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a one dimensional
XXX boner brain
in a three dimensional hologram of consciousness
i am a dumb wind
a slouching mongrel soul
carved in corpuscles

its twenty six dimensions stupid!

mind like a radish in a shit slum
inhabiting a no return winter
of hollow helled mountains

soon to be dead
like disappearing smoke
i hear my voice
trying to count molecules
with a slathering tongue
needle numb
and a brocaded Vox throat of tears
while eyes plead floating
like cataract clouds

and shinning baptism ufo's
god balls shimmering in space
no; no reality quotient here
in a fitted sim built blood machine
of flimsy bone locomotion's
looking for time slips
by life's prodding night stick
in a distortion field

i turn the wheel of shapeless shadows
in satin's mill
waiting dormant
with bloody muzzle
in a 666 cosmic zip code

im just another
Nigger Spic Chink Jew
masturbating voyeur
apple bend over
living to pay the fucking rent
in a house fallen before its built
panting staccato deja vu's
in a no return winter
of pandemonium

in this knot of blotting screams
i try desperately to levitate
from this spittoon of ascending fecal matter

here marble turns to chalk
and i'm always doing gods work
with the devils pride
like a bug in the grass

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There's a tattered photo Carbon dated 250,000 BC Looks just like me Except my skull Looked like a balloon
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