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Wrong

Wrong 

You think you are always fair
you think that you always care,
how could you be wrong ?

You're convinced, that you'r not the violent type
Always passive
don't believe the hype, you are wrong
 

Upstanding ,all the live long day,
the humanist one,
welcoming

You're sometimes aggressive, selfish, 
Even moody.
You could even say stubborn.
face it you are human

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if not hypocrites? really good bullshitters!
found the title a bit blunt as it over-shadowed the first S making it almost meaningless. the line 'Wrong!!!' felt blatant and out of place, like an out of place scream in the middle of well articulated point.
i definitely got this one, though. short and to the point. is it about anyone in particular?

nullus anxietas
the_fool

a total re-write

thanks lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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A little more tightness in your poem would pack a powerful punch, so to speak. ;-)

~A

thanks

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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i think a little more structure to the last line would make it a stronger ending. otherwise, great piece!

thanks

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Good on you for this rant. I take it someone you know is bugging the hell out of you? Someone close, I assume. Way to get it out!!! (is this person passive agressive, or actively so?) I hate the passive agressive ones... so hard for me to deal with. The "in your face, up front" ones are easier for me, lol! And I have more respect for them. I hate the veiked sneaky shit!
Suffice it to say, I enjoyed this poem. but I would have liked more (I'm greedy!)

always, Cat

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its a little confused needs sorting out

glad you liked it thuygh

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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