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time's solemn truth

We are just ghosts
enslaved by time
slipping through
the portals of seconds
squeezing through cracks,

freedom is the illusion
reality lies in delusions
as the soul is raped
by the mind ...

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Weirs thoughts before bed, maybe it was the chocolate ? Lol
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Always nice to read you dear.
Strangely enough I was about to submit a piece about another illusion when I came to read yours
Well I won't tell you what is mine. No secret, just some suspense!
I totally agree that we are the slaves of time and freedom is only an illusion.Well and beautifully expressed

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Its nice to pop in when I can I miss my friends here at the site but I am Lucky they keep track of how I am going and I am very thankful for their love and friendship that' helped in no small way this last year, I have so many Poems to work on and get ready to post when I am well enough

ao glad you liked this one and I am glad the message came across that's exactly what my message is

thank you foe the read I'm very grateful

love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Rula has already commented to something similar I too would have commented...so i just hmmmmmmmm...

Be well,

much love n hugs,

raj (sublime_ocean)

I will let Judd(Judyanne) know you liked it giggle .. I am very happy you liked it though !!

I'll be round later to see what you've been writing,I look forward to it

much love and hugs Jayne xox

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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but I think I would see rather
'freedom is a delusion / reality lies in illusion'
And powerfully arresting, those last two lines...

Take care girlfriend
Love judd
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

A great write I have put most of my comments on PM for this one as it is deep and needs an answer.
Yours as always, Ian xx

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

I will check my pms again and make sure I haven't missed one, I am bound to I am in and out of hospital like a bridegroom on his wedding night, haha anyway I am not finished with this one it needs a little more I am working on it and I have a rough draft I do aim to please and I see someone else has said just that below you lol

love you always Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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ahhhhhhhch
I was just getting into this poem and poof it was done
lol

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

I will be emailing you shortly but wait there is more ! I am working on a type of extension for this one and I hope it pleases you when I do the edit tomorrow night, tonight I am just going to read and comment and find some quality poetry, its when I am in pain I turn to poetry, sad but true, but I al also writing so many other things that I will be posting over the next little while ...

take care sweet lady love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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This such a true, honest, powerful poem! You see things in a different dimension - I find myself say Yeah that's soo true. Awesome

Love Mand xxxx :)

So very good to see you my friend I am just about to have a wander around neo and see what everyone's been writing ... Thanks for the comment and I do see things differently its my little bit of madness my friend lol

biggest hugs and love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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