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Sunku 16 Workshop “Summer's Ensemble”

Summer
Is popping
with nature buzz

animals
insects
ensemble chirps

arrived
summertime
Gaia’s Kingdom

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I will look out for the edits you make for which there is room..your Sunku inspired this

Beyond
the Spring
I hear a buzz

Beetles
chirping
summer songs

Others
join party
from their nests
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I’m weird like that. It’s still spring and everything is drowsy about waking up but I hear them as if they are awake alive and buzzing all around.

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Stanza 3 could be

Soon
our tails swing
in boogie dance

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raj (sublime_ocean)

I’m visualizing the ending as a Kingdom like the lion king movie but with the whole planet involved as a Kingdom

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That's what was the intended purpose in sync withe the "Ensemble" in your title

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raj (sublime_ocean)

Glad it worked

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cheers,
Jess
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

I appreciate your visit as always

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