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The Simple things

Submitted by Tigger Kaz on Wed, 2023-05-17 14:10

A simple thought,
That sets off fears.
Spreading panic,
To create our tears.

A simple moment,
That sets our ways,
Casting time,
To ruin our days.

A simple word,
That sets off a lie.
Spreading hatred,
To make us cry.

But a simple smile,
And a single laugh.
Creates much joy,
And not by half.

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neopoet

Wed, 2023-05-17 14:10

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Tigger Kaz

Fri, 2023-05-19 04:23

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Hi

Not sure if Neo poet glitches, but it's been 2 days and no comment from AI or Geezer.

I would really appreciate your feedback.

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Lavender

Wed, 2023-06-07 19:15

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You have stated the way it really works - one single, simple thought, moment and/or word can turn everything sour. And it seems they have a ripple effect that affects everyone around. But then along comes a smile and a joyful laugh, and it can all change for the better. I enjoyed this very much!
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Tigger Kaz

Thu, 2023-06-08 14:47

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Your comments are always much appreciated.
Thank you

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