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Right place but maybe not the right time
I've been in a mood lately but right now I'm figuring why not
Basically I know I've got a 50 percent chance of you saying no but how bout
I give it a go Well I'm a poet named Emmanuel and it's really nice to meet you
You should already know your beautiful but just in case you haven't heard it in a while
You are
Hope this ain't a bother but I'd love to get a chance to talk to you sometime
I apologize for being so shy
Hi and you are Who?
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Comments
BettyBuff
Sun, 2012-11-04 17:55
Why dont you give it some shape?
Hi,
This is like a monologue...so give it some shape to make it feel like a conversation with a bit more 'punch'
Focus on your key words and then maybe adopt the freeform style. Have a look at my new poems to give you the idea?
Eg., "I've been a mood lately
but right now
I'm figuring out
why not"...
etc. etc.,....give it a go....would like to see how it shapes up.
'Betty'