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Missing Messiah

If I can be whatever I put my mind to THEN I WANNA BE THE MESSIAH

Mr. Microphone Mcgyver Mr. Survivor Almost died in the clutches of the man that contributed

to my birth within his eyes

I must've looked like the Viet Kong

I'm a child of Vietnam

My Father who art in Heaven

Hollowed it be my name Me and Jesus shared the same first name

His was spelled with I and mine is spelled with an E Easily I open my eyes and watch

Time Fly

The beginning and the ending I'm winning even when I'm sinning

This only the beginings end AMEN

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It's certainly not my sort of poetry, but that's a cop out for not giving the poem its due.
Much of it is confusing to me. I read it several times and pieced together some of it that I had missed, but I am still lost in the end. The language is very angry and if that is the "emotion" you wanted to convey then you succeeded without my having to understand it all.
Does any of this make sense?
I don't like the poem, but I appreciate its emotional power.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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I feel like it was the best I could do, due to the fact that I am actually in a mental ward in the Baltimore VA. I've been out practice and my poetry is written the way it is because I am also a rap artist.I appreciate your comments deeply and I hope you read more of my work.I only have one fan and would appreciate if you became my second one.I'm looking forward to reading some of your work also.Stay true to yourself always.......


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