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Involved Feelings

Feeling nothing more then the way you make me

Even if I'm down it's the feeling I get when your around

She got the power to turn a frown right side round

The upside... opposite of being down

It's a shame she's leaving town

Still I wished her the best even when inside I was wishing

She didn't have to go.....With everything in my soul I wanted to tell her don't

If I wanted the best for her I wouldn't be selfish

Can't wait for her return cause I'll just grow more restless

Can't hold my breath either cause I'm left helpless

Without motion as my last breath leaves my body

I still think about her

Editing stage: 


I have looked at a few of your poems/writes and it would be better to edit them into stanzas.
So that on reading there is a natural pause not only to breathe, but to take in the picture you paint with words..
Join the odd workshop one on basic form would do, then others as you need.
Look forward to your writes, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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