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Involved Feelings
Feeling nothing more then the way you make me
Even if I'm down it's the feeling I get when your around
She got the power to turn a frown right side round
The upside... opposite of being down
It's a shame she's leaving town
Still I wished her the best even when inside I was wishing
She didn't have to go.....With everything in my soul I wanted to tell her don't
If I wanted the best for her I wouldn't be selfish
Can't wait for her return cause I'll just grow more restless
Can't hold my breath either cause I'm left helpless
Without motion as my last breath leaves my body
I still think about her
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Comments
Ian.T
Sun, 2012-11-11 10:58
Numero
I have looked at a few of your poems/writes and it would be better to edit them into stanzas.
So that on reading there is a natural pause not only to breathe, but to take in the picture you paint with words..
Join the odd workshop one on basic form would do, then others as you need.
Look forward to your writes, Yours Ian.T
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