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Porte De Porc...

Madness tries its' tricks
But, he pushes it aside
He cannot let it in
He does his job with pride

The guiltless are protected
He does his very best
He takes the sin upon himself
Puts the impure-souls to rest

Tonight, it is a rapist
He caught him as he fled
Too late to save the victim
Sprawled upon her bed

In his spotless kitchen
The chef gets out his knives
Hot kettles boil and simmer
So full of useless lives

The rapist wakes up slowly
“Go ahead, you scream
No one will ever hear you
Wait here, I'll get the cream”

You need to stay awake
I'll shoot you with some uppers
You have to feel the pain
While I make you supper

Trussed up very tightly
He feels a shining knife
Slicing off his fingers
He's screaming for his life

Terror fills the eyes
Of the man who raped and killed
“Please, slay me now, I pray you
I feel my debt is filled”

The chef is humming softly
Whistles while he works
Pleas fall upon deaf ears
He pulls off flesh with little jerks

Screams echo off the tiles
The stainless-steel and all
Horror-filled entreaties
Go bouncing down the hall

“Bloodless bodies don't live for long
No matter how I try
I suppose it's just as well
I couldn't concentrate to fry”

A restaurant of the finest name
Holds the interest of the rich
Long-pork is a favorite
She doesn't know; the bitch!

So, evil do not cross the path
Of this midnight killer
This champion of the innocent
Or he'll make you dinner

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Given the content of this poem- I still found it fun to read. It's Vengeance at its finest. The only constructive advice I have is that you might want to change "it's" in L1 to 'its' (probably just a typo). Other than that- Fab. Thanks for the read.

V

I'm glad that despite the content, you found this one fun enough to read. I always try to give a little humor [dark as it might be], to my Killer works. I fixed the [typo]. Thanks for the heads' up. ~ Geezer

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The killer of the evil doer, great to see him perform on such an animal.
Loved the write and may get back to you later as more comments come in, Digit is having time out away from all that breathe..
Take care, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I'm glad that you liked Killers' little venture into the restaurant business. I suppose that Killer will never run out of bad guys to make into gourmet meals. Hope that Digit is having a great vacation! ~ Gee

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He he he Killer is in fine form...really loved this one I couldn't find anything major wrong with it, nothing stood out... I will have another read of this one a I missed a few killer poems while I am in hospital I will have hours to catch up lol

higgliest bugs and love Jayne xxxx

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just let us know if anyone in that hospital isn't giving you Blue Ribbon treatment and Killer will pay them a visit. He kinda likes playing with all the medical stuff. Killer and I send our love and higgest bugs, ~ Gee

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hope you like it. I left in some glitches caused by my emotional response to what I was reading.
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/porte-de-porc-by-geezer
Posting it to our Neopoet.com Facebook page.

I suspects you might like the novels of Andrew Vacchs. He writes about a perpetrator on perpetrators from the perspective of a NY prosecutor who uses fiction to prosecute those he was unable to lock away forever.

cheers,
Jess
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did a great job, in spite of the material you where reading! I notice that Killer does affect some people that way. No shame there! I will look up this Andrew Vacchs. Maybe he will give me some ideas. Thanks for the read. ~ Gee.
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