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Poetic

sitting
in the corner
of a pub

I write vows
and eulogies
I speak
of the dead
visiting
the departed

speaking of love
waxing of life
on the breath
of a baby

I take minutes
of hours
I wrap my hands
in cheesecloth

stained with black
my fingernails
have loosened
from their beds

life passes through
my pen, surging
and ebbing
with each tragedy
or celebration

I read lips
hear tones
watching from afar
the faces

but unable
to touch
the life in them

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I want to thank Gee for the help and inspiration he gave me in finishing this poem

Higgliest bugs my friend

love Jayne-Chloe

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Glad to help! Thanks for thinking I helped a lot, lol ~ Love ya, higgest bugs, ~ Gee

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There is no thinking about it you certainly did help and it was much appreciated, I hope you are enjoying your Easter celebrations with the family

love and higgliest bugs Jayne-Chloe xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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What is chat on the darkside?

Scott

is a chat run by your's truly, on the second and the last Sat. of each month at 9pm until 10pm. Eastern Standard Time.
Bring your dark poetry and dark thoughts. Sometimes we have a set agenda, sometimes it's just an open chat.
Depending on who and how many show up. The next chat is on the 13th of April. Like to see you there. ~ Geezer

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Do I need to sign up somewhere or just join in? If there is an agenda, does it get sent out in advance?

Scott

You dont need to sign up you just turn up on the day the topic of the day is announced in chat and not sent out before hand ... hope that helped

Jayne-Chloe

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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This is different from the norm, to be able to do all those things and thanking Gee for his help I can only think of a lost Spirit lol.
I see I will have to send out the children to bring you home again lol.
Loved the pictures that passed within touching distance as you sat there in the pub..
I think I like it much better when you gaze across the wasteland to the factories and think of love, I know a contradiction but then it is better to look inward lol.
Take care young lady and try not to do too much, better to walk a full mile, than run a half, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Gee was a tremendous help with this one I was having trouble with the ending but its all coming together now still need to work on it some more its not finished I am very glad you read this and got something from it

I will walk that mile I dont have the energy to run that halfa lol that wasteland is transforming into something else, something new :)

love always Jayne-Chloe

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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a birth of a poem
she is like a candle cold and still
held in a lonely hand so still ...
till she is lit and flame is flickering

going out now more later bye

loved

I cant wait to read it
message me the title when you post
and I will come and have a read

enjoy your time out

love Jayne-Chloe xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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