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opaque dreams
O beautiful night
your black wings
extinguish the light
cloak me in darkness
paint my face in shade
for I am a shadow to life
existing on ash and soot
I am sustained in a void
covered in mother earth
my mask of horror is hidden,
but a full moon unveils my face
and the pall of depression bows
the ebony trail I shred
withdraws from inner light,
I shall subsist in shadows
until silence rules no more
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Frenchf
Sat, 2013-04-20 17:23
This has a religious flavour to it
As it meant to. It would do well for a prayer!interesting
Serendipity
Thu, 2013-04-25 07:06
Thanks French
I guess it does have a religious flavour thanks for the read and your thoughts
hugs JC
("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)
Josephus
Thu, 2013-04-25 07:23
Jayne, my wise friend
For all its darkness there is a strain of comfort in this, Jayne. As I read this I find myself thinking of a tulip bulb in warm moist earth waiting to sprout new life. Waiting "until silence rules no more"
sincerely,
Joe
My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.
Serendipity
Wed, 2013-05-15 09:44
Joe
Thanks for your thoughts and time, I am very happy you liked it
sincerely Jayne-Chloe
("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)
Ian.T
Fri, 2013-04-26 02:52
Jayne
Time to walk in the light it feeds the Spirit, though this write is as usual from you and will show where some go.
It is a shame that there is not more communication between people that need just someone there to hold the light for them, Yours Ian.Tx
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Serendipity
Wed, 2013-05-15 09:46
Ian
Just needing someone to hold the light for them, beautifully sad and said hugs
love always JC xxx
("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)