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opaque dreams

O beautiful night

your black wings

extinguish the light

 

cloak me in darkness

paint my face in shade

for I am a shadow to life

 

existing on ash and soot

I am sustained in a void

covered in mother earth

 

my mask of horror is hidden,

but a full moon unveils my face

and the pall of depression bows

 

 the ebony trail I shred

withdraws from inner light,

I shall subsist in shadows

 

until silence rules no more

 

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As it meant to. It would do well for a prayer!interesting

I guess it does have a religious flavour thanks for the read and your thoughts

hugs JC

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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For all its darkness there is a strain of comfort in this, Jayne. As I read this I find myself thinking of a tulip bulb in warm moist earth waiting to sprout new life. Waiting "until silence rules no more"

sincerely,

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

Thanks for your thoughts and time, I am very happy you liked it

sincerely Jayne-Chloe

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Time to walk in the light it feeds the Spirit, though this write is as usual from you and will show where some go.
It is a shame that there is not more communication between people that need just someone there to hold the light for them, Yours Ian.Tx

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Just needing someone to hold the light for them, beautifully sad and said hugs

love always JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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