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Man, A King Of The Cats

A man who pissed you off so bold
Shopping is like sparkling gold
Glittering in the smile of a rose
When feelings of affection are revived.

I stay within financial means
But sometimes I get so steamed
Without retail therapy to tame my meanness
My submission is in jeopardy.

If I could turn back the hands of times
I may revise words that caused your demised
But then you'd still be the same old guy
I wish I could choke some sense into

A gentle lil pussy
Becomes a fierce cat

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Made me smile. He he This poem is very relatable and very cleverly written. Love the second stanza especially the last two lines.

Very well done! I like this poem a lot
Love Mand xxxxxx

Glad you like it

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A man can pissed you off so bold [bad grammar maybe who instead of can]
That shopping is like sparkling gold
Glittering in the smile of a rose
When feelings of affection is revived. [grammar again are revived]

I stay within financial means
But sometimes I get so steamed
Without retail therapy to tame my meanness
My submission is in jeopardy.

If I could turn back the hands of times
I'd revised words that caused your demised [?]
[I would revise the words that caused your demise]
But then you'd still be the same old guy
I wish I could choke some sense into

A gentle lil pussy
Becomes a fierce cat

Now to the meaning of the poem. From your body of work I know you are in an abusive relationship, so who becomes the pussy and who the firece cat?

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

Pussies can become fierce cats when cornered if it sees no way out. Otherwise stay a pussy.

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Rawwwr grrl!

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

A thorn in my flesh. I try though by revising several times before submitting.

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I like the meaning and the comparison of a,woman scorned or fed up to a cat...docile until pushed to the limits...than look out! Great write

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

I'm glad the cats description worked.

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