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I almost didn't understand where you were coming from with this one; but I was called away from my desk
and when I came back, to reread what I had read, I found a whole new understanding of what the point was.
It was deeper than I first thought. I felt the emotion of separation so painfully, that I saw beneath the obvious to the core of idea. Excellent! ~ Geez.
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Hello, hippiemoon,
I hope school is going well!
This feels like a couple different scenarios to me - love from a distance, hoping for the real thing or the heartache after a breakup. "Like a lazy Sunday afternoon, one we've lived before..." Very passionate and vulnerable.
Thank you,
L

Hello hippiemoon

Since the poem seems about gentilness, I am having difficulty with the pain emphasis. the imagies concerning gentleness is very evocative and appealing. perhaps pain is a poetic device to contrace the pole opposite, gentleness. I think in stanza two talk of pain and then the needed healing does not come over so well. If I change the word painfully with powerfully it works better for me. As it seems this loving painfully is only showing the PHYSICAL results of loving powerfully

This is deep and beautifully written. My partner always says "My love for you is hostile", in that, he would tear the world apart if it meant he could see me smile. I'm still trying to figure out if that's healthy or not, but for the time being, I'll take it.

LOVE this poem. so beautifully written!!
my favorite lines are:

I want you to love me gently
Like a lazy Sunday afternoon
One we’ve lived before.
Sun on my back,
Let me lay out like a cat

I always look forward to reading your works!!
best,
MM