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lost in the ripples

Submitted by Serendipity on Sat, 2012-12-29 06:09

Mirrored mountains gleam
Ripples erase reflections
Water moves away

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

weirdelf

Sat, 2012-12-29 06:30

A lovely haiku

with the most profound quality required of haiku
"Water moves away"
Brilliant!

cheers,
Jess
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Serendipity

Sun, 2012-12-30 01:52

thanks Jess

I appreciate it I've been writing lots of haiku I am exploring the boundaries

Cheers Jc xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Rula

Sat, 2012-12-29 11:17

Painted really well lovely!!

Painted really well
lovely!!

❤❤❤❤❤❤

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Serendipity

Sun, 2012-12-30 01:53

thanks Rula

Very glad you like it

Regards Jc x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Serendipity

Sun, 2012-12-30 01:56

hey Beau

I really appreciate your comment ... I finished another today will post it later tonight

Love Jc xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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BlueDemon77

Sat, 2012-12-29 23:14

I am lost in the ripples with you.

Perfect image, placid, I can see, hear, smell, and feel it. Wonderful work!

Ron

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

Serendipity

Sun, 2012-12-30 02:01

Ron

Thank you so much I've been working hard on the series there are many more just not ready for posting
Thanks for the great comment makes it all worthwhile

Regards Jc xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Ian.T

Sun, 2012-12-30 03:56

Jayne

A good Haiku now here is one for you:-

Serendipity (happy accident (;-)
when all our poets dreams come true
They should write it down

Have a lovely day hey, Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Serendipity

Sun, 2012-12-30 04:35

smiles for miles

And the answer to your haiku will be my next post in half an hour lol

Glad you liked it

Love always Jc xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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scribbler

Sun, 2012-12-30 19:06

Hi Jayne

Dang! Now you've got Me thinking about Haiku and I never can write just one lol. I liked the way you pointed out the delicacy of reflections on water..............stan

Serendipity

Fri, 2013-01-04 08:22