The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem effectively uses descriptive language to create a vivid and intimate scene. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be improved.

Firstly, the transition between the first and second stanzas is abrupt. The first stanza sets a scene of a cold winter morning, while the second stanza suddenly introduces a second person in bed. It would be beneficial to add a transitional line or two to smoothly shift from the solitary winter scene to the intimate setting.

Secondly, the phrase "She outs a small troat" in the fourth stanza appears to contain a typographical error. If "troat" is intended to be "throat", the sentence doesn't make sense in the current context. If it's meant to be "trot", it seems out of place in the intimate setting. Clarifying this line would enhance the overall coherence of the poem.

Lastly, the final line of the poem introduces a humorous twist. While humor can be an effective tool in poetry, it's important to ensure that it fits with the overall tone and theme of the poem. In this case, the humor seems to be at odds with the sensual and intimate tone set in the previous stanzas. If humor is a key element of the poem, it would be beneficial to introduce it earlier or weave it more subtly throughout the poem to prepare the reader for the final punchline.

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don't start without me, I'll be right back! Great job, I like the twist at the end. ~ Geez.
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Interesting and I have learned something new, thank you Alex, troat.
I enjoyed it. I enjoyed your choice of words and descriptions of the scene. It built nicely into a great tale, it flowed well and the punchline was great. Who wouldn't want coffee in bed before anything else? Ruby :)

Hello, Alex,
I tend to disagree with AI's suggestion of where to place the humor here - the ending is a perfect twist!
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Sounds like a wonderful Sunday morning to me, Alex.
And the "coffee' would come in a close second to my
first imaginings of stroking a golden retriever,
but to my great relief,,,,,,,, Its yer Wife!!

Really good piece, well written, and I'm ever so slightly jealous of your Sunday mornings.

Obi.

I love the last line. Sums up what sounds like a years long relationship perfectly. Great job