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I'll never love again

She, who left me alone,

Left me in alone nothing expect pain,

She breaks my heart and I'm crying like a rain,

But does she know the meaning of love,

Look what you have done,

I'll never love again,

I'll never love again...

I left my friend because you,

They still love me and want me back,

If I call them, they’ll come for me,

You're the one who gave me heart attack,

Tell me after doing all this what have gained,

I'll never love again,

I'll never love again...

It has been so many days I haven’t slept,

Still thinking about you, you don’t even regret,

I stopped eating food,

You were calling me fool,

If I trusted you that doesn’t mean I'll get some reward,

You betrayed me and my love this nothing for you at all,

Falling in love with you, it was my mistake,

I swear to god I'll never again,

Schrey will never love again...

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Permit me to make a few suggestions
your first four lines begin with she and makes it a bit redundant
what about

she for the start of the first line
then 2nd line left me alone with unending pain
3rd line she breaks my heart and tears are falling like rain
4th line but does she know the meaning of love

I left my friends (plural) as you start your next line with they
your the one that gave me a heart attack
so what have I gained
don't you even regret
if I trusted you this sentence in very unclear what is meant by doen't me I get a reward
explain this nothing for you at all

I have taken your poem line by line as I stated in my message to you , these are only suggestions and not written in stone

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