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Bitch I’m back freestyle

The one who becomes mature by ripping meat,
He doesn’t like green shrubs,
Someone of them yutes team up on me ,
I’m all alone enough for them,
I turned my back for a short time,
Them mandem spreading myths that my time is gone,
Tell them bitches that I am back,
The one who started writing in my absence,
Tell them bitches I’m back

Them mandem saying I’m gonna kill you I’m gonna abduct you all they just do talks,
They’re just living in a mud,
They wanna be like me that’s why insecurities makes them write shit about me,
They copying my style and they tryna making the same hype as me,
Tell them bitches I’m back,
The one who started writing in my absence,
Tell them I’m back

My life is not like film,
I’ve other tasks to fulfill,
God gives me success moreover he gives me some courts to attend too,
The day I stopped playing games,
Them yutes said I’m out of the game,
Tell them bitches I’m back,
The one who started writing in my absence,
Tell them I’m back

You just taken steps in teenagers,
I know the price for life,
The one who you worship, I didn’t spare them,
What do you think I’m gonna spare you,
All of you motherfucker gonna to hell,
Don’t provoke me to take your life let it sleep well,
Tell them bitches I’m back,
The one who started writing in my absence,
Tell them I’m back

I’m making history with my pen,
It’s hard for you yutes to do it,
Talent doesn’t depends on the place,
I can shake world from a small area in Birmingham,
After this you listen to my old free style verse, all my ops started biting their nails,
Tell them bitches I’m back,
The one who started writing in my absence,
Tell them I’m back

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
Last few words: 
First and last free verse of this year
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I'm not sure if you'll see this comment or if you're checking Neopoet anymore, but here's some things to consider:

- Please consider editing this poem and marking the Content level as Explicit.

-As for the title: you'll have to help me on this, but can you still call it a freestyle if it's written down? Or do you mean you are back in a freestyle way?

-Could you tell me if your accent is a typical Brummie accent? I'd like to picture this in your voice. I feel like that's especially useful for writing like this. That hiphop quality definitely needs voice to be considered.

-These haters you write about, do they ever see your writing? That's just me being curious!

Kelsey

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