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Time

I was begging for time,
But Time never listened to me,
I tried to save my time,
But Time was going away from me,
Then I again tried to do some work to make time in my control,
But Time was getting far away from me,
Time travels really fast,
It was getting difficult to catch up for me,
I wanna say that please try to manage your time,
Time is passing quickly,
Schrey think about your life,
Try to save your time...

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If you beg for time, then you are not addressing time directly.
I would say that you should ask time to stop or pass more slowly.
Like: "Time, please pass more slowly, let me catch up".
"I tried to save more of you"
Thus giving the notion that time is an enity.
Then once you have established that, you can switch to asking yourself
to save time.
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