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I Wonder If You Are Reading This And If You Understand What I'm Asking

i am ready for your crushing blow

break my jaw

slam your fist into my teeth

and, smiling,

i will be sure to thank you

for at least being honest

and saying something to my face

for once.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

Yes, I understand. Insults and slander behind one's back are more painful than physical pain, because there is no defence.

Remember to punch them back though!

A powerful poem.

cheers,
Jess
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i'm actually planning on submitting this to my school's literary magazine. i'll let you know if they get it, too :)
thanks,
mag

author comment

As Jess says this is powerful, about time you told them or shot them, but just tell them will do..
Yes a good submission to the magazine, we await the report on this one.
Yours Ian.T

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