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I Wonder If You Are Reading This And If You Understand What I'm Asking

Submitted by emogothgirl on Tue, 2013-02-26 17:15

i am ready for your crushing blow

break my jaw

slam your fist into my teeth

and, smiling,

i will be sure to thank you

for at least being honest

and saying something to my face

for once.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft

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weirdelf

Wed, 2013-02-27 00:40

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Yes, I understand. Insults and slander behind one's back are more painful than physical pain, because there is no defence.

Remember to punch them back though!

A powerful poem.

cheers,
Jess
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emogothgirl

Wed, 2013-02-27 23:15

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i'm actually planning on submitting this to my school's literary magazine. i'll let you know if they get it, too :)
thanks,
mag

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Ian.T

Wed, 2013-03-06 03:24

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As Jess says this is powerful, about time you told them or shot them, but just tell them will do..
Yes a good submission to the magazine, we await the report on this one.
Yours Ian.T

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