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FRIEND AND NOTHING MORE

Submitted by Psyve on Wed, 2011-03-02 14:34

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FRIEND AND NOTHING MORE

Let it happen once before,
It will not happen any more:
Did you really think that I was such a bore?
My heart wasn’t yours to take,
You see, it's really for my sake
That I must not let it happen any more-
Was it so hard to understand?
All I asked for was a friend
And nothing more…

Writin’ letters, makin’ plans,
Was I boy, or was I man?
Now I wish the sea would roll onto the sand…
For, if a lesson's to be learnt,
This boy just got his fingers burnt-
But he'll forget you if he must, and if he can-
For he'd rather be alone,
Than risk you spit upon
His outstretched hand… .
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lou

Wed, 2011-03-02 15:01

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I like it , sorry can't see anything to improve.

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

Psyve

Thu, 2011-03-03 16:29

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Thanks for reading. Glad you liked it.
Cheers
Psyve

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loved

Wed, 2011-03-02 16:27

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may i ask
of u just to be sure?

loved

Psyve

Thu, 2011-03-03 16:34

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Thank you for stopping by to read
Psyve

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2011-03-09 11:57

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Do you ever write anything that sucks? LOL! I can really relate to this song, as it has happened to me several times. Now I'm afraid to put myself out there. I really liked the last section:

Writin’ letters, makin’ plans,
Was I boy, or was I man?
Now I wish the sea would roll onto the sand…
For, if a lesson's to be learnt,
This boy just got his fingers burnt-
But he'll forget you if he must, and if he can-
For he'd rather be alone,
Than risk you spit upon
His outstretched hand… .

I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work.

always, Cat

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Psyve

Wed, 2011-03-09 15:12

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I've written my share of things that sucked.
LOL.

Glad you liked this one and felt you could relate. It's part of the human condition, I guess....

Still we keep putting ourselves in positions of implicit faith and trust in people we feel a strong connection to with our hearts, even if our brains tell us to act differently...

Psyve

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Kailashana2

Wed, 2011-03-09 15:27

This gives me goose bumps, it's THAT beautiful.

Thank you for sharing your heart.

~A

Psyve

Thu, 2011-03-10 05:27

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Thank you for your comment.

Nice to know that you felt moved by this one.

I do appreciate your stopping by to listen to my songs and your words of encouragement.

Psyve

P.S. I may be a tad inactive on this board for the next 3-4 weeks, as I will be travelling and am not sure how much connectivity I will have....

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Psyve

Thu, 2011-03-10 15:48

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Thank you for taking the time to read and for your kind words.
Am pleased this struck a chord with you.
Psyve

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