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FRIEND AND NOTHING MORE
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FRIEND AND NOTHING MORE
Let it happen once before,
It will not happen any more:
Did you really think that I was such a bore?
My heart wasn’t yours to take,
You see, it's really for my sake
That I must not let it happen any more-
Was it so hard to understand?
All I asked for was a friend
And nothing more…
Writin’ letters, makin’ plans,
Was I boy, or was I man?
Now I wish the sea would roll onto the sand…
For, if a lesson's to be learnt,
This boy just got his fingers burnt-
But he'll forget you if he must, and if he can-
For he'd rather be alone,
Than risk you spit upon
His outstretched hand… .
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Comments
lou
Wed, 2011-03-02 15:01
Psyve
I like it , sorry can't see anything to improve.
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Psyve
Thu, 2011-03-03 16:29
Lou
Thanks for reading. Glad you liked it.
Cheers
Psyve
loved
Wed, 2011-03-02 16:27
then what are friends for
may i ask
of u just to be sure?
loved
Psyve
Thu, 2011-03-03 16:34
Loved,
Thank you for stopping by to read
Psyve
Candlewitch
Wed, 2011-03-09 11:57
Dear Psyve,
Do you ever write anything that sucks? LOL! I can really relate to this song, as it has happened to me several times. Now I'm afraid to put myself out there. I really liked the last section:
Writin’ letters, makin’ plans,
Was I boy, or was I man?
Now I wish the sea would roll onto the sand…
For, if a lesson's to be learnt,
This boy just got his fingers burnt-
But he'll forget you if he must, and if he can-
For he'd rather be alone,
Than risk you spit upon
His outstretched hand… .
I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work.
always, Cat
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And reply in kind, thanks.
Psyve
Wed, 2011-03-09 15:12
Cat
I've written my share of things that sucked.
LOL.
Glad you liked this one and felt you could relate. It's part of the human condition, I guess....
Still we keep putting ourselves in positions of implicit faith and trust in people we feel a strong connection to with our hearts, even if our brains tell us to act differently...
Psyve
Kailashana2
Wed, 2011-03-09 15:27
This gives me goose bumps, it
This gives me goose bumps, it's THAT beautiful.
Thank you for sharing your heart.
~A
Psyve
Thu, 2011-03-10 05:27
Anna,
Thank you for your comment.
Nice to know that you felt moved by this one.
I do appreciate your stopping by to listen to my songs and your words of encouragement.
Psyve
P.S. I may be a tad inactive on this board for the next 3-4 weeks, as I will be travelling and am not sure how much connectivity I will have....
Psyve
Thu, 2011-03-10 15:48
Shirl,
Thank you for taking the time to read and for your kind words.
Am pleased this struck a chord with you.
Psyve