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Why do I want you so damn bad?
You really make me squirm.
My innards rip apart in fire.
With just a single look from you,
My soul is set to burn.

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and the tetrameter/trimeter mix works great - especially the extra tetrameter..

is this a particular form? tell me if you know the name of it - or is it one you thought up? lol in which case we'll have to name it 'the rhiannon'...

good write - the meter helps in making the pace of urgency the words convey

love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

This form came purely from my soul. Lol

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Its like you saw my heart and wrote this. I love it.

I'm glad you like it.

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This is honestly my first real attempt at any meter. I tried it because I'm starting a workshop soon on meter.

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Maybe that glow!!
poetic passion!!


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