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If you forget me by Pablo neruda (stripped imagery wprkshop)

I want you to know
one thing.

You know how this is:
if I look
at the moon, at the branch
at my window,
if I touch
near the fire
the ash
or the log,
everything carries me to you.

Well, now,
if you stop loving me
I shall stop loving you .

If suddenly
you forget me
do not look for me,
for I shall already have forgotten you.

If you think it long and mad,
and you decide
to leave me,
that on that day,
at that hour,
I shall set off
to seek another land.

if each day,
each hour,
you feel that you are destined for me,
ah my love, ah my own,
in me nothing is forgotten,
my love is based on your love, beloved,
and as long as you live it will ours.

Editing stage: 


Remember just one thing
Should you forget every moment of my life
I sacrificed for you,
the scooter rides
the car drives
the walks to the club the mall and back

your security every moment to moment
was always upper most in my mind
as always was and will be
but remember this
should you feel the age
the deafness
the disgust and frustration deeply sunk
then remember this
ere you even think of forgetting me
I shall be lost by thee
lost into the wilderness
where you can never find me
then only you will know
what and whom you have lost

striving on the streets
of a no man’s land
you will find thyself

I will be no where
to caress
gone with the whistling wind
I will be far from thy remembrance
into the wildest of wilderness
man made as your own creation

You will find hollowness
when I am nowhere now around
your security unfound.

But should you continue to love me
as before
Know this I will still be at your beck and call
the fragrance of life
the sweetness of nectar
my Love will still be yours

just remember this
I am born for thee
So Love me....

In vein Of Pablo Neruda’s poem

now let some one else say and compare which is what

Enough of the original left to have something to work with later on.......stan

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