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FINAL THROWS

Am I out of my league
Are my poems too long
Should I burn them or fling them away
Poetic fatigue
Has me drowning in song
With visions that won't go away

I read and I read
And try to belong
To a club that esteems one with praise
I breathe and I bleed
whether rightly or wrong
And cast myself down in a daze.

Am I too short on stature
Are my poems too weak
Do bush poems even count anymore
I'm caught in contracture
with muscles so meek
is my genre subconsciously poor

If I had aptitude
to write in disguise
With one-liners that morph into zen
lifting my altitude
climbing the skies
Would my poems be allegory then

But I lack the ability
Startled like deer
Caught in the headlights of prose
Am I made of fragility
judging by peers
Am I writhing in my final throws.

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Structured: Western
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I wrote this over the last couple of days. Was unsure whether I should post it as I am under some trepidation regarding the style of poetry I compose.
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Please stop doubting yourself, it's an issue I struggle with every day, I think you're a wonderful Poet and I think your clever and talented writer and maybe a little too humble. I am writing an epic I've been working on it for my mother for over 12yrs now, your worried about long poems? my epic is now over 1900 stanzas long.

I loved this musing on your writing though, you're poetic to your very core my humble friend

There is nothing wrong with self-reflection from time to time it can recentre oneself.

hugs and love Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Dear Jayne, Thank you for your lovely thoughts. I don't know quite what to say in answer to your uplifting vote of confidence. I just thought that my bush poetry looked somewhat rustic compared to the quality of the poetry that I have been reading here. I thought it seemed out of place. 1900 stanzas long is a novel Wow! That shows some focus of thought. I will keep writing .

Thank you once again for picking me up.
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Hannah

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We all have our own style you're one of a kind here imho. It would be a real loss to the site if you stopped writing. I enjoy your poetry very much, and I'll always lift you up if you need a hand up. Its the Aussie way no?

Hugs and love Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Thank you for your response valuing my work and abilities. I love this site and do not want to give up on it. I just compared myself to the talent found here and felt as the poem says "out of my league". The quality of the poets on this site is amazing.

Thank you for your valued vote of confidence.
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Hannah

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Don't ever question yourself Hannah though we all do from time to time. If in doubt read lots of poetry from different sources and sites. A lot will inspire one to be a better writer, but, by god, there is a huge amount of pretentious crap out there written by so called writers whos only talent seems to be to make their writings as incomprehensible as they can. You write, as I try, from the heart, don't ever stop. Alex.

Thank you for your caring concern. I guess poetry comes in a variety of forms and it is probably not a good thing to compare oneself with others without having indeed a full understanding of the form by which the comparison is made. I see beautiful poetry pass through this site and think that I am not so good at expressing myself as these.

Thank you for understanding me and giving me the moral support to continue. I am indebted to all of you.

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Hannah

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I didn’t read the other comments. I just assume they’re all positive because that’s how we roll on this website. You’re fine. Bush poems are great. Where else am I going to learn about the culture.

Now this poem is good too, how in the world does anyone get better at anything without questioning their worth. It’s a dangerous game, don’t berate yourself but definitely push yourself. Challenge yourself.

Good going,
Tim

I don't read the other comments until after I've made mine. I don't want to be influenced by other people's opinions.

I agree with everything you've said. And also Hannah has inspired me to write more about our homeland he has more impact than he knows.

Kindest regards Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Thank you for your kind comments and vote of confidence. I am feeling much better and more confident now thanks to all the support I have received from those who have commented (not just now but since I began here about a week ago) on my work. The standard of poetry here is very high the similes and metaphors just blow me away. And I put myself on shaky ground when I started comparing myself to These great poets - yourself included.

Thank you for being here.
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Hannah

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You wanna know where you stand of course. Ultimately the validation has to come from within. I’ve enjoyed your writing thoroughly

Tim

Thank you for sharing your thoughts and for the vote of confidence. It was silly of me to be so doubtful but I do find the poetry on this site to be of very high quality. I should not try to compete but rather just be in acceptance of the friendship and guidance that I find here.

Thank you for all your comments given in the past week or so that I have been here. Your support has been invaluable to me.

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Hannah

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