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Three hands turning in a circle
as day lifts her skirt to the night
one slower than the other
slower than the other

I want them to stop
take the darkness as my mistress
for tomorrow only brings
another day like today
and this day was unkind

But alas
the light shall come
like a bitch in heat
panting and pawing
scratching and clawing
til there is nothing left of me
but three hands
moving in a circle

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Brilliantly composed - cheers....hope the coming days aren't unkind to u...

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I'm gonna return. I know there's an unstated message here but I'm too tired to find it tonight lol.....stan

Look forward to your return.


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the descriptive is so clever - three hands going around and around... I love it
and day lifting her skirt ---

and the description of her coming like a bitch on heat -- one really gets the emotion of hatred for the day, for the life the narrator is living, and the ending so depicts that helplessness, and boredom

well done - one of the best reads I've had for a while (and I've been having some pretty good reads lately)

love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Admire your vision and creativity in every verse of this poem of unique dimensions...I loved besides everything else "three hands moving in a circle" made me wow!you have discovered a novel poetic was such a pleasure to read this after my struggles with Sonnets and meters...


raj (sublime_ocean)

Thanks for stopping by and having a read. Glad you enjoyed it


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