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The Selfishness of Selflessness
construct for the warmth at hand
winds circle to mounding sand
hardened by the throws of rain
fired by the past of pain
higher, than the angels climb
stronger, than the poets rhyme
passersby pay no heed to end
space for only family and...
oh, shit. there's no door.
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Geezer
Fri, 2020-02-21 10:14
That's what comes...
of building walls from the inside out and painting yourself into a corner. ~ Geezer.
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