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Which would you Choose?

Voices walking 2 beside
No eyes or ears for another
Mockingbirds echo a sing-song tune
All the same, to a worried lover

Moments flee with the time machine
Still they speak to only others
Write it down I beg of thee
How else might I speak, thy brother?

And if those ears shed their deaf
Voices walking 2 beside
Would they be the same Damn words
Or just a sound from deep inside?

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Comments

interesting,
the natural voice vs the poetic voice
or the cultured voice vs raw, real voice
or the sane man's voice vs the insane one
or just one ordinary voice with a lot of mental machinations going on in the background?

I don't know, I pick #4

cool, unless I missed the gist.

Al

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