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And then we woke and forgot anything ever happened

The night fell in all white and strong
A whistling through the window's song
No hurry to her resting place
Came stealing steps from days long race

She offered up a healing calm
A note or two from nature's psalm
With trees all wrapped in street light glow
She sang a tune we used to know

As time took moment for a pause
And freed us from our daily laws
A silence came and held the land
And let us sleep all hand-in-hand

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great poem....
love that poets are moving towards
rhyme
the mystical feel of this one
is suspenseful

metaphors galore
kinda gleeful
in readin it

symbolism and mythologies

Thank U eightmenout

Mr Wolf!

Thank you, sir for the kind words. Appreciate you taking the time

Scott

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