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By faith

Submitted by Tigger Kaz on Wed, 2023-04-26 17:01

Though howling wolves be at my door
I Fear not the angry mob that chases me
And when sharper claws get all the more.
I Fear not the threat so stark to see.

Yet in angels wings my refuge find
Holding me near God and closer to thee
And when Satan's crew is not so kind
I'm held as a light for all to see.

Even through the storms of such despair
No weakening of my soul, nor my belief
For in evil's chase I must prepare
To fight all that which gives me grief.

Yet shining brightly he shows me the way
And builds me up to be better still
He's my rock that guides me day by day
Builds my faith, and ever more will

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neopoet

Wed, 2023-04-26 17:01

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "By Faith" is a powerful expression of the speaker's unwavering trust in their faith. The use of vivid imagery, such as the howling wolves and sharper claws, effectively conveys the speaker's sense of danger and persecution. The contrast between these images and the refuge they find in the arms of angels and God creates a compelling narrative of strength in the face of adversity.

One suggestion for a line edit would be to change "no weakening of my soul" to "my soul remains unshaken." This would add an extra layer of poetic language and reinforce the speaker's unyielding conviction.

Overall, "By Faith" is a well-crafted poem that effectively conveys the power of faith in the face of opposition. The imagery and language are both engaging and uplifting, making it a great read for anyone seeking inspiration.

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Geezer

Wed, 2023-05-03 11:51

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the theme is one of faith, and how you deal with the life you lead.
I'm not sure of the motivation for capitalizing the word [fear], is it something hidden
a thing that is endemic just to you? I see someone who feels that their religion and faith
puts them at odds with the rest of the world or perhaps a particular clique. I am sure that your
faith will sustain you and help you, persevere. The rhyme is a little bit archaic, but perfectly understandable
and I think for me to try and improve it, would b e a waste of your time. You have a good piece here.
~ Geezer.
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