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Dungeon

Dark is the dungeon
where I dwell
my life has become a living hell

Night descends but for all I know
there could be daylight
or a candles glow

The fires of hell may be burning bright
but this I cannot see
the bread crumb trail I followed
ended inside of me

Witches on broomstick
are for fairy tale and light
other entities fill my night
leaving me pallid with fright

Incense,myrrh and candle wax
never stand a chance
as I've come to watch the demons dance
with their banner and their ax

Ablaze with summoning the powers that be
they wail and flail at the rancid air
for all and none to see

Within this dungeon
where I dwell
I am the ruler
of my own hell

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Because Ian asked
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Comments

I think this is a very good write, and I hope Fiction lol.
These are places that some dwell for a while it is human to do so.
It is the getting out is the problem, not sure how you get out of a hole there are many suggestions on how though lol.
Take care my thoughts to you and yours, as always, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

you are the only one to comment on this poes
it has been posted for three days now. Just goes along with what I was saying in my message to you
Nothing has changed

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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Please not to worry about the number of comments it is a one sided thing.
I have a terrible problem with it.
I clear out the Undiscovered place many times and the ones that are there still don't respond, I think I left Neo last Xmas time I was so cross with the whole thing, and near on did it again this week.
I know how you feel and it is a damn shame that we have to keep going along with the ones that can't do wrong.
If I put a swear word in my title I get a better response, I just don't know anymore.
I am in a workshop with Weirdelf at the moment and the going is very hard never got mentioned in dispatches even lol.
One thing I will say that you just keep posting your works here, as with mine it's a good storage space lol.
You take care out there and know we often think of you both,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

will go over them again and see if I am seeing what you see now if that wasn't enough to confuse you I'll think of more lol thanks for your input ok went through it again if anything gets changed it will be stanza one have to come up with something though

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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I'm sorry to be late to come to this. I'm really lazy.
I think this piece belongs well to jess's workshop where real emotions come across to me though I wished no one would have such an experience.
Please post more. It is always great to share..

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thanks so much foir your comments. I think it might be to late to join Jess's workshop
but I appreciate that you suggested it. What if I were to tell you that when I wrote this piece I was very much at peace with myself and the world around me

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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love the poem but I just wanna ask,
stanza 2 line 3 " or a candles glow"
shouldn't the candles be candle's ?

Alid

you might be correct.
Thank you so much for reading this is one of my favorites

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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Love the poem and read out loud sounds great, i keep hearing Vincent Price reading this when i hear it inside my head. Great write. Love Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Hello and thank you do much. I always liked Vincent Price's films so this come as quite a compliment for me

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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