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Just beautiful

I have learned a lesson
as time rolls by
some come and flatter
others come to shatter,

never mind the ones who come
simply to ploy
their idiocy to deploy …

remember only those
who smile
as some day
they too shall pass away

then the reality of life shall surface
we all will also pass
as we all, including me
are passers by

read this message
with love

Grateful

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a great reminder dear loved

If this was mine, (i wish i can write such a piece) I would consider the repetition of
the word pass,pass by,pass away,passers in S2 (but it is only me).

Thanks for sharing.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

the way the river ought to flow
and your lovely words
you ought to know
can never be ignored
by poets few
and
one am I
how you wish
you knew..

now you do...
thank you...

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Only the Good Samaritan is truth, where they will stop or pause to see and not pass you by.
I have journeyed long young Bard and many have I seen, and spoken to.
I found out that I had borrowed a body all those years ago, that was taught English, with a broad Wiltshire accent.
I was thinking with that voice yesterday, and if you really feel, to find that voice, then you begin to wonder is it just a pattern.
Tiny, tiny electrical actions that turn the world for me to my original language, English, these are the same electronic actions that talk Spanish to some and a multitude of languages throughout the world.
Poetry a language of its own, but in many tongues.
Our understanding of what you write is not easy as we are individual, each to his/her own.
Your poetry is another way of talking to many, it is a flowery way, streaked with the ways of old, you just have to remember that not all understand the way your poetry talks.
That we, You and me, can write and read your words and understand all the others that read your words it is a lottery as to how many think and feel the way you do..
Be Patient with the world young Bard, that you have written should be good enough for you.
Take care young loved, Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Our understanding of what you write is not easy as we are individual, each to his/her own.

Ian I'm sorry
for having over looked this ...
you have devoted so much time and energy
on a small bard like me

but I assure you
I am not as small
as perhaps you think

but I do take it as a compliment
as my thoughts on this site
I now ink

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We have a belief that you are as big as all your component parts, and that our Spirit courts infinity for eternity then we are all great..
Just a thought young Bard, so that you never think that I underestimate you in any way.
All Spirits are equal, it is as a watch that has stopped the sum of the parts are the same, it is just the movement is not the same, yet infinity bows to our being and the Great Spirit holds out a helping hand so that you can become equal..
There that is simply put lol, Loved all we have to do is believe in our own selves and those two friends Eternity and Infinity will hold hands..
Yours as always Ian.T
PS:- I call you young Bard not a small one, those were your words LOL

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

hi loved

this is nice. a little over-loved (overdone in loved style - (((smile))))

I have offered my edits in bold – I have bracketed those parts I suggest to delete

all imo

love judy

xxx

Just beautiful

 I have learned a lesson (of mine)
 as time rolls by
 some come and flatter
 others come to shatter,
 never mind the ones who come
 simply to ploy
 their idiocy to deploy …

remember only those
who (pass by smiling) smile (cos there are too many ‘pass away’s as is)
 
as some day
 they too shall pass away
 then the reality of life shall surface
 we all will also pass (away)
 as we all, including me
 are passers by
 (read this message and with love
 and do say
 time and tide do not wait
 for anyone any way….) –  cliché

or, if you insist you might like to finish in loved style with the line
read this message (and) with love

xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I knew too it was a bit jarry
so now all I wish
many will love it
as you three
Judy
and
two above do
need I say
thanks to you

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That you see us as we talk of your write is good enough for us..
Go well young Bard and have a lovely day, Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

of simple words, deep feeling, ingenuousness, a certain edginess and compassion.

You have here. Love this piece. It's also beautifully written freeform, incorporating form, craft and a feeling of spontaneity.

And good revisions.

Beautiful, my dear,

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

and its only sometimes ....
you said it right
How are you
hopefully overcome the shadows of evil
which by now are past!

loved

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just deep, abiding grief,
you must allow me that.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

Jess ,missed you

loved

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Such lovely wisdom! I always knew you were capable of great things! Only one suggestion: I would remove (of mine) as it is already implied and the removal of those two words would give it a smoother more even flow. Yes... I like this one very much! It is one of my favorites of yours!

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

lol loved
i didn't see it was still there - brackets and all
:)
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

at the leading poets comments
I became blind for a moment!
vanished it is...

loved

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Such lovely wisdom! I always knew you were capable of great things!

*as Cat you are poetic worldly wise
and
I know when you fly by ,
the heavens seem to heave a sigh
how happy one can be
when on one's page
Cat's impressions
one can see
so loved as usual appreciates
thee ancient culture can't be forgotten
so do pardon me.

loved

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*Hugs*

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

hugs hugs
thanks thanks
i was wondering
who

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You shine, my friend

hope you are better now
than then...
wish you get well soon
for all over here
twill be a boon

loved

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once again

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Hi Stan
the scribbler and dribbler
this one
the latest ...
all have put their stamp
except yet u and Esker

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Even a guy who is not much at free verse (me) can tell this is a good one. This says outright about all that I attempted to convey as subtext in "end of a day's walk". You succeeded and I didn't.
And now I think of all the folk
I've met along the way
those who hindered, those who helped
or tried to lead astray
....vs.
some come to shatter
some come to shatter
never mind the ones who come
simply to ploy
their idiocy to deploy.......................same coin, different sides...........................................stan

.you are the master of poetry
I am but a connoisseur
I can only appreciate the intent
if it brings out valuable content,
which you do as always..
so this summarizes my poem

better or worse are Einstein's creations
all is relative
this world and the universe

loved

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