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demo soldiers

Soldiers are simply shields to bear the brunt

of swords and bullets
soldiers have no right to cry,
they should only orders apply
else they would have been in a better position
If ...
Do you know?
the dullest guy reaches the highest pavilion
where angels fear to tread
soldiers love to go there
till they are stained
dead.
okay blasted too.
if that pleases the soldier in you

But stay tuned
wars will come
what of democracy
don't be crazy
they fight more
plan secret strategy
and over throw the opposition
over the benches
and
you all know it
but swallow silently!
Alas as a good soldier
one has no choice
save a choked voice.

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lol, Now you have written a very good piece on the soldier and the craft of dying.
A challenge for you to write of those wonderful people that slave to keep the status quo.
The housewife who stays behind keeping a house for the soldier that returns and a shrine for those that don't.
Then all the others that are as slaves to keep the rich, rich, and poor, poor.
If only they all realised that one cruise missile could feed and clothe many people if the energy was used in another way.
I cannot decry all those millions of men who gave their lives in wars gone by, but if all that power was used for the good of man.
And not as a beating stick for many who know the values of life, then this world would be a real paradise.
It's no where near Sunday, maybe I will dream of Hyde Park Corner.
If ever you should reach these shores be sure to go there and listen to the few who try to convert the many..
Take care young Bard, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

OKAY I accept your challenge

next one will be on a house wife ...one who is nagging, 55, most of the while...
your tummy is so big
tis like you were ninth month in
and your beard so grown your shave a rascalian
and smelling foul teeth
use some sweetened toothpaste
wow your nose you pick so often
like a chameleon
what errors did I make
when I gave unto you youthful mistakes,
I vow never to marry you ever,
if I return your way again
so get out of my sight
give me your purse
and divorce I shan't give you
it will be worse

I shall deny you myself
that'll be the best curse
you dare a woman man
now get lost
else I say things worse....
NOW IAN THIS BARD SAYS DON'T CURSE!

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The women in your life must have been terrible to you that you paint this picture.
Oh well back to the drawing board, I shall enjoy the lovely ladies that adorn my life, shall I send one to look after you lol,
She will be a red head and around 57 so look after her, they are a special species.
Go well young Bard and be good, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

a woman 57 ???
no way 17 may....
find a way

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No Chance of one at 17
71 maybe LOL
Have a great day , Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

ought to do
for any guy
like me and you
how do u do

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Great to play with numbers but remember when your number is up there is no way on Earth you can make it smaller but there are a few things that seem to get smaller if only I could remember where they are LOL.
Take care young Bard we will have to wait for correct critique on this piece I am just playing again, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

but kind you
and for that
thank you

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I enjoyed this poem as is usually the case with anti-war stuff, but I have to say that I think democracy usually defends itself against tyranny, not the other way round. A different question is whether we should fight for democracy in other lands, but I remember that a lot of Americans did just that when they helped to defeat Hitler, thank God!
Best wishes,
Robert.

war is just a small episode
in a world democratic
to gold
and oil sold

we have all kinds of leaders today
masks they ALL wear
don't they
thank you for your wisdom on my verse
maidenly you display

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